The IELTS Essay Question was:

Many university students live with their families, while others live away from home because their universities are in different places.

What are the advantages and disadvantages of both situations?

The student essay I gave feedback on is:

During the university, some students continue living with their parents, while the other students live far away from their families. This essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks for both situations.

On the one hand, getting free accommodation and fresh cooked food are the main advantages of sharing the house with their family. For example, it has been shown that the greater challenges for students who do not live in their parents' house is the stress of paying for rent and cooking. As a result, those who remained to stay with their family are deprived of these inconveniences. However, relying financially on your family is the main disadvantage because students get used with this. As a matter of fact, getting used to an easier life makes the decision of moving out from parents' house harder. Therefore, a financial separation of their family will cause extra pressure for those who stayed with parents over this time.

On the other hand, going to another city or country for university helps students to manage their time and money. Being responsible for your accommodation by paying the bills, cleaning the house, are extra responsibilities for this category of students. These extra activities have proved to help the students to develop the skills in long-term adulthood such as time and money management.However, many of them get sick with stomach-related diseases. For instance, the nutritionists say that students at the age 18 or 19, are not aware of the benefits of cooking at home. As a result, because of the price and time consuming, students tend to eat just junk food or meal deals which are delicious, but cause them stomach ache.

In conclusion, either living with their family or living far away from their parents has both the advantages and disadvantages which lately will affect negatively and positively the students.