In this episode I give Naomi feedback to an IELTS Writing Task 2 two sided opinion question based on the topic of the Income of sports professionals. 

We look at ways that you can make sure your main ideas are related to the question. We also look at the importance of having a strong thesis (overall answer to the question).

I recommend that you attempt this IELTS Writing task 2 question yourself and then read the essay below before you listen to the podcast. 

The IELTS Writing Task 2 question was:

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The essay I gave feedback on was: 

Some would argue that it is justified that many sports players earn far more money than other people working on different fields of activity,while others say that this situation is not fair. While all advanced workers at the same level of experience should be paid similarly, I believe that the sports professionals' salaries are understandable considering the length of their career.

On the one hand, the experienced employees should have approximately the same revenue no matter the area of study and practice. As a matter of fact, nowadays, the salaries in different areas such as teaching, IT or healthcare are quite different according to the business success but this situation has to be changed because everyone should be able to afford the necessary things. For example, It has been shown that software developers with an average of 5 years experience have an annum wage of around £50.000- 80.000, while  teachers in the same category gain about £40000. It is undeniable that it is crucial to earn half salary than others but I consider that there are areas more profitable than the others, therefore, employers can afford paying higher salaries to their employees.

On the other hand, the sports professionals can perform for a short period. It is undeniable that sports players deserve their incomes not only because they have spent their entire childhood practicing for a future career but also because after becoming famous they can perform for a maximum of 10 years. Therefore, their income has to cover the  money invested in their training and afterwards, the expenses for their further life. For instance, it was shown that a football player with a career of 10 years gains just enough money considering that he has to cover all his spendings from the whole life.

In conclusion, I believe that sports people deserve their incomes because their career lasts just for a couple of years. I disagree that everyone classified in the same category of experience should get similar incomes because not all businesses are as profitable as others.