In this lesson, you'll see why so many model essays are NOT model essays.

For each of the points I mention, you'll learn a better alternative so that you can make changes to your own writing.

Here's the question:

Some people believe that charities should help people in need no matter where those people are in the world. Others feel that these organizations should only serve the people living in the country where they are based.

Discuss both sides and give your own view.

Find the full lesson on my website:

https://ieltsetc.com/2021/03/ielts-band-9-sample-essay-charity/

Watch my YouTube video here:

https://youtu.be/c4nMPXwJls4

My tips about Coherence and Cohesion (avoiding mechanical linking words) are here:

https://ieltsetc.com/2020/01/ielts-writing-coherence-cohesion/

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https://ieltsetc.com/2020/03/to-what-extent-do-you-agree/

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